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Post by tabiris on Jul 16, 2008 0:03:37 GMT -5
for those that dont remember Ezri he's the biggest mouth in the forest and that fellow with the tentacle spikes on his back.
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Post by NightWing on Jul 16, 2008 8:54:21 GMT -5
That actually didn't go so badly. That's kinda surprising xD
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Post by tabiris on Jul 17, 2008 20:20:26 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter 5.1: Bang, Bang[/glow]
“Dat were too easies.” Tony was walking along the path to the cabin. He was almost alone.
-Well I had to walk your hand through that one but you did the right thing. Are you happy?-
“Yeesh what’s wit youse ands happiness. And what does youse mean holds mein hand throughs dat one?” Tony mumbled angrily kicking a stone.
-I’m actually more sorrow that happy oriented. As for the hold your hand, surely you don’t think that that little demon approached you with his intentions or that that lady with the wand was actually going to trade for that death machine in your pocket. If you pulled that out that little Ezri chap would have had the whole forest believing you’re a demon slayer by daybreak.-
“Was?” Tony looked beside him as if the voice was beside him and there was. Or at least it looked like there was for a moment.
-Oh don’t pull that German with me Tonius. I know full well you just said “what”. Or could it be that you are surprised at my statement. Bit of advice: knock on every door.-
“Whys?” Tony reached the cabin and went to open the door.
-Manners and such.-
“I’s lives heres toots.” Tony opened the door slowly and saw Zeno and Mye on the couch talking. “Mein Gott.”
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 17, 2008 20:26:06 GMT -5
Ahh... A little more explanation.
So what's the huge shock of them talking, or is there more?
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Post by tabiris on Jul 17, 2008 20:28:21 GMT -5
ok now heres a little fun question what does everyone think should happen next?
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 17, 2008 20:30:41 GMT -5
I have no idea. It's your story. XP
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Post by tabiris on Jul 17, 2008 20:33:25 GMT -5
but i wanna know what others think XP
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Post by tabiris on Jul 17, 2008 21:13:58 GMT -5
[glow=white,2,300]Recap:[/glow]
Due to the confusing plotline i'm going to recap everything for everyone in what it appears now.
In the begining a computer sends a mechanized owl to find supernatural energy. The owl finds the cabin and is destroyed by Charby and Kavonn. Who are part of a 4 man group called the Black Knights with Hex and Tony.
An entity, that is now my co-host in Night of the Stormrider, called Fear possesses Zeno who is not with Mye instead it's Tony with Mye. (The lack of originality there is sickening, I know.)
Some interloper entered this dimension through a portal in Zeno's room of which the scythe did not appear to take kindly to.
Fear has shown it's very good at manipulating Zeno's mind by making him scare the area of the forest with insane laughter.
There was a Black Knights meeting showing their extreme ineptitude aside from that they are good at recaping past events. And inadvertantly pointing out that the owl was a really advanced piece of tech.
Later Tony disappears in a psycho fit and the Black Knights end up finding an ashen field. We find out later that Tony was possesed by another voice named Sorrow and was out hunting for Mye's wand.
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Upon Tony's return to the cabin he confronts Charby who informs Tony that Mye and Zeno are spending time together cause of Tony's psycho fit the previous day however Tony says that he was gone for 2 days.
A midget demon has been made reference to a couple times and we dont know much about him other than that he was captured and isn't on the side of the computer.
The computer seems to be a little too kind though and shares sensitive information with the little demon and even lets him wander around the compound.
Tony later has a dream where he's talking to a more vicious form of himself. This more vicious form gives Tony an AutoMag handgun and it somehow appears in Tony's inventory in real life.
The next day at the market Tony pays a visit and with the help of Ezri manages to locate Myes what that is held by a hag. The hag gives Tony the wand in what appears to be a trade for his hat but she returns the hat. The hag becomes a beautiful lady leaving behind the cryptic message "Things are not always as they appear."
During said events Sorrow implies to Tony she has a lot more influence than he realizes in his life.
Tony then returns home and finds Mye and zeno together talking.
And thats where we are now.
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Post by NightWing on Jul 18, 2008 1:26:08 GMT -5
Recap? That's way more informative than just a recap, I didn't know half this stuff.
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 14:56:46 GMT -5
i added more to it but left out some little bits
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Post by NightWing on Jul 18, 2008 16:34:16 GMT -5
Well... the first chunk was a lot of new information to me, the second half was a recap though. Very nice thing to have here. Thanks
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 17:10:56 GMT -5
yes i see that readers get confused easilly when i write. especially when my editing is doen secondhand.
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 18, 2008 18:15:35 GMT -5
Okay. XP I am understanding stuff now. Thanks. ^^
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 19:41:46 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter 5.2:[/glow]
-Well this is just sad… and unlikely. Really what sick mind gets it’s kicks out of things like this?-
The ash field, a barren field… of ash; the snow white ash that caked the ground made it a fertile place but nothing had had the chance to take root yet. Though that was not the point of interest. Rather it was the woman staring at the badly beaten alp in the base of a sinkhole.
-Well little alp your sorrow pierced even the deepest depths of my soul. I will protect you from loosing everything. That is my burden. That is my sorrow.-
The woman vanished into thin air and several miles away in the cabin Zeno suddenly jumped up. “I know where Tony is!”
“As much as we would like to believe that Zeno we highly doubt that.” Charby was sharpening his hooks with a bored expression on his face. Around him Hexavier and Kavonn were doing magic things.
“Well if you don’t believe me fine! I’m going anyways and if you try to stop me it will be the last thing you ever do.” Zeno left the room and stormed out of the building.
Deep down in the basement Mye was sitting in a corner holding her wand.
Meanwhile back at the ranch of Zeno’s mind.
-Just a little farther now and we’ll be there. It will be a strange sight. Will you laugh with me?-
“What makes you say that?” Zeno was flying over the trees when he caught sight of the sudden decline in tree line. “Wait what’s… that?”
-Ash fields. Lovely sight. Don’t land. He’ll be at the end of the red trail. Will you laugh with me?-
“Voice you are not really helpful with all the laughter stuff. On the other hand the red trail was right on the spot.” Zeno descended towards the end of the red ash trail. “Oh my god! Tony!”
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 19:42:32 GMT -5
I shall tell you all now i hate this chapter with a passion but it was going to happen anyways... i may rewrite it though so we can get an idea of what happened to Tony.
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 18, 2008 19:51:02 GMT -5
That would be nice. What a change. So there was a laps in time I'm guessing, since Mye has her wand.
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 19:53:09 GMT -5
Tony just dropped the wand at the door.
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 18, 2008 20:16:10 GMT -5
Ah. ^^ Okay. Maybe when you make something sudden like this, you should make a bit of an intro paragraph to let us know what's going on. That is mostly my problem since I can tell you seem to like to go with in medias res but it can be really confusing if there is no explanation to what happened before.
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 20:18:47 GMT -5
or i could be witholding that information and using it in the next chapter XP
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 18, 2008 20:21:41 GMT -5
That is a possibility and then I will just have to continue to be confused until I read the next chapter. Maybe though, fill in a few hints and explanations as you go? Seriously, I have been very lost from the beginning and as soon as I think I'm getting it, I'm lost again. XP I think this may be one of those that I wont quite get until you end it. XP
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 20:24:22 GMT -5
i see. then i have achieved my goal XP
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Post by NightWing on Jul 18, 2008 21:16:32 GMT -5
xD
I would like to know just how whatever happened to Tony happened, but the rest of it I think I understand... I think.
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Post by tabiris on Jul 18, 2008 21:28:31 GMT -5
oh thats all gonna be explained.
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Post by tabiris on Jul 19, 2008 23:17:24 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter 5.3 Part 1:[/glow]
He was running. Running from that which he thought he saw happening. He was deep in the heart of the forest. He was charging blindly through the trees, There was the sound of a stream, no, a river. There was a bridge. He made an attempt to cross it. The bridge collapsed at the halfway point. He smashed into a boulder arm first with a resounding crack. After an immeasurable amount of time he struggled to the shore and continued in his blind rush. The tree line vanished and he was in a plain as white as snow. For a moment he thought he saw himself. Suddenly he was in a hole and there was darkness. He felt as though a voice was calling out to him.
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“She is quite enchanting. Does that Tony really deserve her?” Zeno was dreaming. He was talking to himself in his dream. His dream self was rather imposing. His coat was tweaked a bit with some stars on the shoulders and some form of firearm in a holster that seemed sewn onto the coat. There were a couple buckles on the back too but whatever they attached to wasn’t there. “She should be yours.”
“But she’s Tony’s girl and Tony’s my best friend.”
“Fool! He’s an alp. Alps are manipulative little incubus that use their hats to control others minds. He’s clearly using it on Mye! Think back on the past few days. She’s been hanging around you more than anyone else. She clearly likes you best and enjoys your company.”
“But… but… I have to save Mye!”
“Then use this. It will take that alp out of the picture easily. He’s not bulletproof like us.”
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 19, 2008 23:22:00 GMT -5
Uh-oh. This could get dangerous. I think I'm getting this now... at least this part. ^^; So are the voices working against each other?
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Post by tabiris on Jul 19, 2008 23:27:40 GMT -5
not sure honestly.
Now for my authors one note:
This is the first half of the chapter that helped found this entire storyline. so yeah thats why this chapter is so much better but there are only a couple chapters after this one and then the story will be done for this part. then i'll either get back to night of the stormrider or the other one thats up. or i may start another one and update one of the three in some random order
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Post by ogrefairy on Jul 19, 2008 23:30:37 GMT -5
I see.
Alright then. Now I'm all anxious to see what you have planned if it is to be ending so soon. XP
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Post by NightWing on Jul 20, 2008 0:10:01 GMT -5
Seconded Easily the most straightforward of what we've seen so far.
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Post by tabiris on Jul 20, 2008 0:49:53 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter 5.3 Part 2:[/glow]
Thump. Thump. Thump.
“Tony, please don’t die on me. You can’t leave me.”
Thump. Thump. Thump.
“You can’t die! I need you!”
Thump. Ker-chunk. Creak.
“Tony. Please stay with me.”
Looking from the barely opened door one could see Tony. He was laying in the bed unconscious. His wounds were healed for the most part but he was quite unconscious and his health was plummeting like a stone in water. It was a perfect angle.
-You intend to do it? It isn’t funny at all. There is no humor in death you are only instilling sorrow. Will you reconsider? Will you laugh with me?-
He’d drawn the tool it was aimed at the helpless alp. His hand was shaking. He was scared.
Something materialized in front of him. A woman. She was in rags. She was about his height. She looked scared. “Why are you listening to that dream? What does it give you? Do you think it’s funny to toy with the lives of others? Does this make you laugh? Will you laugh with me?”
He closed his eyes and squeezed the trigger. There was a resounding bang and then all was silent. Well… it was silent for those that didn’t see the woman. She was shrieking like a banshee choir with megaphones. She almost looked like she was cracking. She vanished from Zeno’s point of view and it was silent for all. Though Zeno was long gone his weapon still smoking on the floor.
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Post by NightWing on Jul 20, 2008 0:57:23 GMT -5
... So Zeno killed Tony, due in some part to the influence of Fear? And when that happens, Sorrow shrieks horribly and Zeno vanishes? ... I'm missing a lot of somethings. And I probably have something wrong too. xD
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